Comments on: Is this good for a book? http://www.tonyrobbins-live.com/1145/is-this-good-for-a-book-3/ And what is your Biggest Challenge today? Be Healthy & Fit Again, Relive Your Relationship with True Love & Passion, Find Your True Talent & Dream Career, Become Financially Free, Rediscover Purpose for Living, Be Happy and Make the Most of the Gift Called Your Life Now! Wed, 28 Jul 2010 15:09:19 -0900 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.8.2 hourly 1 By: ~Oasis Water~ http://www.tonyrobbins-live.com/1145/is-this-good-for-a-book-3/comment-page-1/#comment-8204 ~Oasis Water~ Mon, 08 Mar 2010 17:24:59 +0000 http://www.tonyrobbins-live.com/1145/is-this-good-for-a-book-3/#comment-8204 1) Dragon World? Really? You couldn't just make up a weird, fantasy name? 2) It does sound like Eragon, but I won't judge. As long as this Max guy doesn't get his own dragon or be some type of dragon rider. Dragon-slaying is alright, I guess. 3) By your summary, your story sounds like every other fantasy. Evil (immortal) guy taking over the world? Check. On a planet other than Earth? Check. With mythical creatures? Check. With some kid being the one to save them all. Check. I suggest changing things from the list above which are basically the norm for a lot of fantasies. You've really got to think long and hard on it. How about making the evil guy mortal? How about making him a WOMAN. That's never been done before. Change the name of the planet. Take out dragons and do a less-known creature like a Chimera or something. How about making the kid younger. These characters are always older teenagers. Why can't someone do the struggles of a KID trying to save the world? He doesn't have to act immature unless you make it so that he will be.It might be easier for you to relate to someone who is at an age that you've already experienced, instead of one you have yet to be. My character is 12 and is very protected and spoiled; he's quiet and intelligent and likes to think about what's going on. But of course, he's got young people flaws. Make sure you have a good balance. Like I said, think long and hard on it...You'll be surprised at how much originality you can come up with. Good luck!<br><b>References : </b><br> 1) Dragon World? Really? You couldn’t just make up a weird, fantasy name?

2) It does sound like Eragon, but I won’t judge. As long as this Max guy doesn’t get his own dragon or be some type of dragon rider. Dragon-slaying is alright, I guess.

3) By your summary, your story sounds like every other fantasy. Evil (immortal) guy taking over the world? Check. On a planet other than Earth? Check. With mythical creatures? Check. With some kid being the one to save them all. Check.

I suggest changing things from the list above which are basically the norm for a lot of fantasies. You’ve really got to think long and hard on it. How about making the evil guy mortal? How about making him a WOMAN. That’s never been done before. Change the name of the planet. Take out dragons and do a less-known creature like a Chimera or something. How about making the kid younger. These characters are always older teenagers. Why can’t someone do the struggles of a KID trying to save the world? He doesn’t have to act immature unless you make it so that he will be.It might be easier for you to relate to someone who is at an age that you’ve already experienced, instead of one you have yet to be. My character is 12 and is very protected and spoiled; he’s quiet and intelligent and likes to think about what’s going on. But of course, he’s got young people flaws. Make sure you have a good balance.

Like I said, think long and hard on it…You’ll be surprised at how much originality you can come up with. Good luck!
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]]> By: 17JIMPY07 http://www.tonyrobbins-live.com/1145/is-this-good-for-a-book-3/comment-page-1/#comment-8203 17JIMPY07 Mon, 08 Mar 2010 16:42:59 +0000 http://www.tonyrobbins-live.com/1145/is-this-good-for-a-book-3/#comment-8203 1st of all, please dont tell me that you have actually written this in your story: 'A planet named Dragon World with many similarities to Earth such as the life of humans and bazaar creatures like trolls, giants, dragons, snakes, and huge lizards.' because if so rewrite that! cos that would be awful make some back story to it, they visited earth and picked up their traits- some crap like that. (my example is awful though..) and possibly rename the planet.. dragon world..? that is far from original really!<br><b>References : </b><br> 1st of all, please dont tell me that you have actually written this in your story:
‘A planet named Dragon World with many similarities to Earth such as the life of humans and bazaar creatures like trolls, giants, dragons, snakes, and huge lizards.’

because if so rewrite that! cos that would be awful make some back story to it, they visited earth and picked up their traits- some crap like that. (my example is awful though..)

and possibly rename the planet.. dragon world..? that is far from original really!
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