The following text is a book I’m working on. It’s a rough draft, if you know what I mean so try not to judge it too harshly. If the plot and/or title has already been used, please say so before I finish it and half to write it all over again. If there’s anything that you think it too typical than also type that up. If you have any ideas to lengthen the plot and make it more interesting and intriguing, I would be grateful if you could include those too. Thanks a ton in advance! The title and plot is bellow…
Title: Dawn of Nightmares (or The Four Fates)
Plot: A young man called Garth Cullman seems to make everyone have a good time no matter what the circumstances. Over time, his skill grew and he even managed to make fierce enemies come to terms and draw up a truce. Then they would walk away wondering what it was that caused the strife in the first place. He became a mediator of sorts and would travel from village to village, town to town, and kingdom to kingdom helping wherever he could. One fateful day, King Toor of the Northern Plains brought his sick daughter to him. She was close to death. It was that day that awakened an ominous power within him…and the Grim Reaper. Even though he healed the princess, who he later falls in love with, the event unleashed the world’s worst nightmare: Grim Reaper. Since nature is all about balance, Garth learns from his father that the balance to his unique skill is the monster he unknowingly unleashed. In order to set things right, he must somehow use a mysterious scythe and collect the Encasements of Destiny, also known as the Four Fates. These are the entities, if you could call them that, of the four domains: Earth, Air, Fire, and Water. The four magical properties are kept by the four dominant races of the four domains; for earth it is the Temple of Lythúlwaith, the Goddess of Life, for air it is the female griffin, the only one of her kind and the most powerful beast with wings (she carries the Encasement of Destiny with her werever she goes and never touches the ground except when she mates). For water, it is the leviathan (or a kraken) who lives in a giant and dark crack at the bottom of the sea. For Fire, it is the Chimaera (unless I can find something else) who lives off the edge of the world to the southeast. No one who has gone there has returned, but Garth must or else his world will be destroyed. However, he learns of what must be present in order for the Encasements of Destiny to be useless to the Grim Reaper, the Star of Kudgle Varin. It is a six pointed star that’s magic is only present when the two triangle haves of it are joined together surrounded by the Four Fates in a secret island, the location of which is lost to all. That is also where the triangles lie and where Garth must put the combination together to save the world from the Grim Reaper. Or else…they are doomed.
This is just the basic plot and I still have to work out some of the finer details, names and suchlike. If you have any tips and all, please tell me.
I NEED YOUR ADVICE!!! Thanks in advance.
dude i would have change the plot so that there are many people at war then like the grim reaper comes after healing the bitch his bitch then the main character has to make every one make friends and then they have to rally against the grim reaper which the earth air fire and water magics come freom the diffenet tribe and they all try there best but end in failer lol
other than that its pretty good you’ve put a lot of thought and you story will be good anyway you put it i’ll pick it up
February 27th, 2010 at 7:38 am
Seems good. You’ve obviously put a lot of thought into it. But perhaps you shouldn’t have given so much, you wont leave much incentive to by the book. Also, you don’t want folks stealing your ideas!
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February 27th, 2010 at 8:20 am
dude i would have change the plot so that there are many people at war then like the grim reaper comes after healing the bitch his bitch then the main character has to make every one make friends and then they have to rally against the grim reaper which the earth air fire and water magics come freom the diffenet tribe and they all try there best but end in failer lol
other than that its pretty good you’ve put a lot of thought and you story will be good anyway you put it i’ll pick it up
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February 27th, 2010 at 8:37 am
It sounded good until you got to the point where Garth learns he has to collect the Four Fates. Then it turned into the storyline from a computer game.
I like the idea of the world having to be balanced. Maybe once the Grim Reaper is unleashed, whenever Garth uses his negotiating skills, the Grim Reaper gets stronger, or causes more carnage. So Garth has to figure out some way to get what he needs without negotiation (which is presumably his strongest ability) or (more gruesome) he has to decide how many deaths are acceptable in his quest for the Four Fates.
Drama is all about conflict, and a large part of that is putting your protagonist(s) outside their comfort zone(s). Since the guardians all appear to live a long way from civilisation, he might not find out about the cost of negotiation until he’s retrieved the first object and is coming back – a town or village that he passed through on the way out has been destroyed for no apparent reason.
The four classical elements have been done to death (pun intended), so I would try to find something else for the Four Fates to be made of or connected with.
EDIT: Don’t worry about the idea being copied (not stolen). Anyone who does that still has to write the book, which represents a much bigger commitment than coming up with the idea. If he does write a book, it’s going to be very different from yours.
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February 27th, 2010 at 8:49 am
Sounds like it needs a bit more Poopy McLoopy.
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February 27th, 2010 at 9:35 am
Sounds a little bit like Avatar: The Last Airbender with a computer game plot line.
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February 27th, 2010 at 10:00 am
Since your thoughts are already into magic you might as well have a dabble. Learn to pray to God first of all, get used to the name of Jesus and the powers that come from that source (John 14;12) THEN INVOKE AMAYMON to get ready to work in Goetia then for my suggestion try to waken Gusion and then Ronove.
This is just going into the backyard of Judaism Christianity and to an extent Islam. Well now you know everything and can do everything. Next summon Pruflas. The nature of Pruflas by invocation is kindness to others and to you. Magic takes major amounts of courage and determination and constant faith. The thesis you raise is of control such as might be practiced by the Reptilians who are presently taking over the Earth by forced intermarriage. Ought I to mention that finding the parameters of your forces will harden cynicism regarding matters beyond your control?
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http://www.deliriumsrealm.com
http://www.daemonen.de